rough draft

so here is the ruff draft concept of my film Tristan. Before it was what it is now...


The film starts out with a normal man getting ready for work. All of a sudden his front door gets broken down and several men in stocking caps rush in. They seazed the man and toke him to a van. Once inside the van the they nocked the man out. When the man awakes, he sees that he is duck tapedto a chair and locked in a room. As he comes to his senses, he starts screaming and thrashing. Two of the men come into the room and ask him to tell them where he hide "it" he says he doesn't know what they are talking about and he doesn't know why he's there. They beat him up but once they relize that he won't tell them anything he knows, they lock him back up in the room. After a few days the man is screaming, taterd and torn; the two men come in the room and ask him if he will now tell them where he put it. But he still says he doesn't know and they should just kill him now. So they drag him to there boss. When he looks up he sees that is it his boss from work.
The man freaks out. Not knowing why his boss is there and with the men that kidnaped him. His boss asks him if he won't tell them where he hide it they will have to kill him. The man says he doesn't know what they are talking about so they should just kill him now. His boss says fine kill him. The next thing he wakes up in his bed; hears some one moving around in his bedroom. Looking around, he sees his girlfriend zipping out her sutecase. She looks at him and says if you wanted to break up, just tell it to my face. Instead of keeping me up all night; yelling at me and telling me I was worthless and I'm not your boss! She then takes off one of her shoes and flings it at him. It misses so she takes off the other one and hits him on the head with it; then leaves. He gets up saying to him self wow that was a bad night. He then starts to hey ready to go to work. It ends